Response to Paul's "Support Group"

Hi, Paul. Your story made me uncomfortable...

It was a story about a man who is addicted to masturbation, and so attends a support group of people who have been sexually abused. I get the irony. Very nice. I was wondering what kind of support group he was in the whole time, and when I found out...it made sense, especially knowing who wrote it. This is definitely your brand of humor.

So some awesome things about your story. First of all, the entire thing is one big monologue. It's a character piece, like a Robert Browning poem. Sort've. Anyway, I like the experimental form. I also like the humor in the story, like the examples of stupid Jules has done. I also like how you characterized him through the judgments he passes on the other people in the group. He assumes everyone is psycho. On pg. 4 he says "I'm just like everyone else here" after acting kind of cray. He talks about there being a "lot of cuckoos" at meetings like this, and says "I hope you will allow me to laugh at you, too, when you talk about the dumb stuff you do" (pg. 5). I also really like how you conveyed the conversational tone of the narrator. He pauses, interrupts his own thoughts, doesn't finish sentences. It makes it feel very authentic.

So, suggestions. There's one thing that confused me (and maybe it's just because I'm kind of sheltered, I don't know) but on pg. 6 I have no idea what transcripts are, and what kind of shows were being referenced. Also, I'm not sure about the ending. Jules becomes more confident, and gives a little speech about how this will be mutually beneficial, but then he's like "just kidding, I have to go." The humor is great, but I guess I don't understand how I am supposed to feel about the character at the end of the story. There is a lot of humor in this story, but I feel like I'm missing the real point. The humor in the ending sort of distracts me from any substantial change that may have taken place in Jules.